Gap Nation

There's nothing that I like to do more in this world than spending time with my brothers, growing up there was four of us and we had to do everything together and I mean everything. My older brother Tori was about five years older than me and I remember him being my greatest role model because he didn't care what people thought about him, if he liked it he did it. My brother had an amazing style his personality was outgoing, confident and everything I ever wanted to be, me and my two youngest brothers all looked up to him. We lost him four years back, and that was a difficult time for me and my family. I lost one of my brothers and that was a knife to the heart, people always consider  me very outgoing, loud, energetic, and all that stuff but if it wasn't for my brother showing me that it's okay to be yourself. I don't think I would be like the guy I am today, he had the best style that I never seen before. I admired him so much they're were times when me ...

I believe that in Charles M. Blow’s " Library Visit, Then Held at Gunpoint" is more successful in delivering his thesis statement because he shows a situation that occurred at his sons’ school that put us in what's going to happen next. It goes in greater detail about what's going on, not for too long but to give us background information. Now some of the reasons why Blow's was more successfully in delivering his thesis statement than David Brooks is how he explained it. In paragraph 6 through 9 it put the reader in his son shoes what exactly is going on. "I did not pay him any mind, and continued to walk back towards my room. I looked behind me, and noticed that the police officer was following me. He spoke into his shoulder- mounted radio and said, i got him;”  There's more, up until we get in paragraph 9. It shows the Fear that his son is going through " at this point, I stopped looking directly at the officer, and look down towards the pavemen...